Monday, March 11, 2013
Fei's Fan Fiction
A new draft The Rescue
London, 2013. Raining. A crowd was jostling down the street, among them, there were students, businesssmen, waitresses etc. They were people in various occupations. If you were now in a high building and looking downwards, you would see many umbrellas moving like a stream.
There was an ordinary looking black umbrealla, and Toad was under it, wearing dark-brown suit and with a serious face Toad had changed, he was no more the crazy road drier a d the trouble maker, and the one always got overwhelmed in his own fantacies. Toad had changed. Toad had became another man.
He was now as precise as an clock, as sensible as a 007.
he looked at his watch, 11:15. His lunch appointment with the Mole at the Chinese restaurant at Eden street was at 11:30. Fifteen minutes was more than enough for him to get there as Ede street was not far from here.
And it was at this tome he wanted a cup of hot coffee. Fro refreshment? For a bit warm up in this chilly November day? He could not tell the exact reasons, all he knew was something clear: he wanted a cup of hot coffee.
Therefore he stopped in front of a coffee stall. A few minutes later, he had his first sip at the fragrant coffee, and it was at this moment he realized there were talking and shouting behind him, as if a crowd had gathered up behind him. Something was happening.
"For whatever you do, don't jump!" "Step back, don't be an ass!" As soon as Toad made out those words, he also saw a man standing on the edge of the top level of a high building about 7 or 8 floor high.
A policeman was standing beside Toad, his face was very white and he was shouting loudly as his colleagues and other people in the crowd. "Excuse me sir."said Toad in a low voice as he put one paw on the shoulder of the policeman, "
"What?"
"In any minute that guy could jump. It is no use shouting down here, we need to go up to stop him."
"That might frighten him and he might jump."
"Going up is the only way to stop him."
A few minutes later, four man appeared in the top floor of that building where the guy was. All of them were not in their police suit but common clothes, and Toad was one of them.
Toad was desperate, his mind looked very unclear, he was shouting in his extreme voice: "I don't have the fucking money to pay you back! I am penniless, I am not a human any more, I am a dog now. A dog,hahahhahah." He waved his arms in a mad way and letting out a painful howling:" Why you bastard always beat me, stop beating me, I am going to jump if you still beat me!" One of the men grabbed Toad's arms and threw him to the ground, had one feet on his belly:" You fucking idiot, if you can't pay us back, why you borrow the fucking lot of money from us!" He and the other two men started to kick and beat Toad madly.
The man who was about to suicide was now startled at this scene, stunning. And it was at this very moment, in one split second, one of the men stopped kicking Toad and threw himself at the startled man, pushed him to the ground, cuffed his hands from the back. The rescue was successful.
Toad, the hero, was now struggled up to his feet.
He pulled out the phone from his pocket and switched it on( he turned it off when climbing the stair up here). He dialled Mole's number, and spoke in a low voice:" I am sorry Mole, I could not come to the lunch Today. You must listen to my explanation......."
The Final Fan fiction The Rescue
As time passed you and I would change, so did our good friend Mr Toad. Nowadays, motorcars could bring no more pleasure to him, indeed he now did not even want to cast a simple look over those stupid things. His friends would sometimes joke with him by mimicking the sound of the car horn in front of him:" Toot-----toot toot, do-----dodododo." And Toad was a good natured animal, beside, he was headless, so he was never upset about it.
Although causing no more accidents on the road, Toad's craziness never faded away with the adding of age. In this snowy, chilly winter, he was madly following his new hobby------watching movie. He devoted all his spare time to cinemas. One time he knelt down halfway through the movie, and banged his head on the chairs again and again as that part of movie was heart-breaking. And at the same time he cried out just as a lunatic:" Oh, please don't die my hero! Come back to life! Oh!!!!!" There were quite a few women and children got seriously frightened by his outburst.
In those snowy, chilly winter mornings, while the other animals were still fast asleep, Toad would already be on his splendid carriage on his way to some cinemas. In fact, if you ever happened to see Toad on his carriage, then you could almost be sure that he was about to go to the cinemas.
And now he was, sitting on his carriage, put his paws into his pockets to feel the solid existence of the movie tickets, and a dreamy, longing expression appeared in his face. The cinema would be in the next street, and snowflakes were swirling in the air silently. Toad's face was glowing.
But, what was that? A crowd of people had gathered up, all looking up with worried faces. Toad also looked up, and he saw a man standing on the edge of the top level of a 7,8th building. Toad's face soon lost its colour and he opened his mouth big.
Everybody was shouting:" Don't jump!" so did a group of policemen, all looking very serious. Toad, was now in such a big fear, he was a very kind animal, he did not want to see such tragedy to happen!
He was so nervous, he could not even keep still, instead he jumped out of his carriage, jumped up and down and waved his short arms in the air grabbing whatever he could grab and threw it into the air-----and that happened to be a policeman's hat.
"What are you doing you idiot, get out of here, we have no time to deal with you!"
"Excuse me, don't you dare to call handsome Mr Toad 'Idiot' while he is actually the smartest.."
"Shut up! Just shut up!"
"Oh! Oh! I must not shut up, for I now got an idea in my mind."
A few minutes later, four policeman appeared in the top level of that building, all of them were not in their police suits, but in ordinary clothes. Toad was with them. Toad looked so desperate and it seemed that his mind was very unclear. The poor animal was shouting in his extreme voice:" I don't have the money to pay you back! I am penniless! I am not a human any more, I am a dog!! A dog, hahahhahahah, a dog, hahahahahah." He looked up into the sky letting out a painful howling:"Ah!!!!!!!!!" Then he suddenly stooped down and crawling on his fours. One of the policeman kicked his back hard, shouting:" This is not the first time you say that you don't have money to pay us back. If you cannot pay back the money, why you borrowed so much money from us! You such an ass!" Then all these four policemen started to beat and kick Toad in a violent way,while Toad was still shouting on the floor:" Inhumanity! Inhumanity! May God witness this! Oh!!!!Ahhhhh!!!!"
The man who was going to suicide was startled by what he saw, he wondered what was the whole story. Just at this moment, in one split second, one policeman grabbed his arms and threw him to the ground. In another split minute, the other three police man came, four of them holding the man firmly he could not even move. The rescue was successful.
Toad, the hero, was now struggled up to his feet.
Although he was painful, his heart was filled with great happiness. For the man was saved and for he was about to appear on news paper as Hero!!!!
The next day Toad was on newspaper, and what he said in the interview was truthfully recorded in the newspaper, there included sentences as such: " I always save people, when bank is robbed I would appear, and give every criminal a good hiding. Of course I did not have the chance to do it yet, so I just hope some banks would get robbed one day so I can go and rescue the staff there, hahaha." "What? Oh, hero, oh, yes, I am a hero, that is for sure.Hahahahahahahahhaha, who else can be as smart as me, nobody! Not a single one!"
When Mole, Rat and Badger read newspapers at Toad's hall, all of them covered their face in shame. And Toad, took a big swag of his beer, looking out of the window, the snow was making the world very pretty. He was so happy, he was overwhelmed in happiness, so he started to sing Toad's song(This part is copied from the original <The Wind In the Willows>)
The Toad- came- home! When-the-Toad-came-home There was panic in the parlours and howling in the halls,
There was crying in the cow-sheds and shrieking in the stalls,
When the Toad- came- home!
When the Toad- came- home!
There was smashing in of window and crashing in of door,
There was chivvying of weasels that fainted on the floor,
When the Toad-came home!
Bang! go the drums!
The trumpeters are tooting and the soldiers are saluting,
And the cannon they are shooting and the motor-cars are hooting,
As the- Hero- comes!
Shout- Hoo-ray!
And let each one of the crowd try and shout it very loud,
In honour of an animal of whom you’re justly proud,
For it’s Toad’s- great- day
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Sounds interesting.
ReplyDeleteWould you include any of the other characters and elements of the same plot?
I will think about that, now I don't think I will include other characters, because there is only 800 words allowed.
DeletePlease see my note about post titles :)
ReplyDeleteInteresting concept and definitely a good twist to the ending!
ReplyDeleteAm I right if I assume that the main character is in the modern age(21st century)?He has email address and everything! I am picturing a toad in 007 like suits!
There are few spelling errors- the blog has the spelling check system too :) Otherwise I think it's interesting!
Thanks a lot, I will check the grammar and spelling carefully:) I actually abandoned the first draft about dating, but I still wanting to make the story interesting as I think Toad is interesting!!!!!
DeleteI love the modern twist on this story! I think you did really well.
ReplyDeleteThank you:) I also like your writing ,I think it is very touching and the flow is very good.
DeleteI also like the twist on the story Fei - a good job overall
ReplyDeleteNeds proof-reading of course to check for small errors
Is a 007 sensible?
:)
Hi Fei just read your story again. I found a mistake in paragraph two, I think you meant watching movies instead of watching movie. I really like your new final fan fiction, I think that it suits the orinal story more and yet still has that modern twist that you wanted.
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